08:25 Jun 25, 2009 |
English language (monolingual) [PRO] Art/Literary - Music | |||||||
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| Selected response from: Deborah Workman United States Local time: 13:56 | ||||||
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5 | based on |
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5 | "based on" is unnecessary to your sentence |
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based on Explanation: 'based on' is fine. I'd write the entire paragraph as follows: Instrumental interlude Total of 16 bars. The first eight bars are predominantly melodic instruments elaborating on the motives of the voice, ending each phrase with prominent syncopation. The second eight bars are exclusively based on improvisational percussion. |
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based on Explanation: I think the second eight bars are improvised percussion (such as drums, tambourines, congas), like in jazz, where the players play their instruments independently. For example, starting with an ensemble, then the piano solo, bass solo, drum solo, etc. except that the music is based only on percussion instruments. |
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"based on" is unnecessary to your sentence Explanation: Basically, the author is saying, "Apparently, the second eight bars are percussion improvisation only." |
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