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21:38 Feb 14, 2015 |
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English language (monolingual) [PRO] Social Sciences - Telecom(munications) / Mass communication, critical approaches to media | |||||
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| Selected response from: B D Finch France Local time: 19:52 | ||||
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4 +7 | Not really |
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4 +1 | break it up into sections |
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3 +1 | The explanation follows... |
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4 | Clarified ... ? |
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3 | Rearrange it |
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confusing sentence structure break it up into sections Explanation: I understand this as being composed of the following (slightly simplified) components: "Media-driven urbanization breaks up networks while putting in place a more general form of assimilation..." AND "Media-driven urbanization requires the duplication of many separate units wherever it takes place" Although quite what it actually means I don't know! |
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confusing sentence structure The explanation follows... Explanation: the urbanisation is the operator here; it does three things: requires duplication of units; breaks up networks; and installs assimilation (whatever that may mean) |
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confusing sentence structure Clarified ... ? Explanation: Sorry to say that ... The original text is clear enough - at least, to those who understand it! Thus, media-driven urbanization, which requires the duplication of innumerable, individual units wherever it operates, breaks up networks at the same time as it installs a more over-arching form of assimilation around a ‘few production centres’ of culture. --> 1. Thus: 2. wherever it operates, media-driven urbanization requires the duplication of innumerable, individual units, 3. (while*) at the same time it installs (creates) a more over-arching form of assimilation around a ‘few production centres’ of culture * 'as' in the original, where it has has 'temporal' significance, not 'cause and effect' |
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confusing sentence structure Not really Explanation: Take out the subordinate clause "which requires the duplication of innumerable, individual units wherever it operates" and you are left with the main statement: Thus, media-driven urbanization breaks up networks at the same time as it installs a more over-arching form of assimilation around a ‘few production centres’ of culture. The two things that occur "at the same time" are the breaking up of networks and the installing of "a more over-arching form of assimilation". Once that is clarified, you can add back in the extra bit of information about "media-driven urbanization", which is that it "requires the duplication of innumerable, individual units wherever it operates". |
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