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Meus pensamentos de mágoa

18:17 Feb 7, 2019
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Portuguese to English translations [PRO]
Art/Literary - Poetry & Literature / Fernando Pessoa
Portuguese term or phrase: Meus pensamentos de mágoa
My difficulty is in how to translate this line to rhyme with the last one. For the last line I have "Of the dead body of the waters". For "mágoa" I thought of sorrow, unhappiness, grief, sadness, etc, but none of them rhymes. :-)

"Boiam leves, desatentos,
Meus pensamentos de mágoa
Como, no sono dos ventos,
As algas, cabelos lentos
Do corpo morto das águas."

-- Fernando Pessoa
Oliver Simões
United States
Local time: 23:30


Summary of answers provided
4My thoughts of woe
Uvierode Woglo
4my hurt feelings
airmailrpl


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My thoughts of woe


Explanation:
I could not find any world to rhyme exactly with 'waters' so this is my suggestion, considering at least the effect of alliteration since both words start with the letter W.

Uvierode Woglo
Brazil
Local time: 03:30
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Native speaker of: English
PRO pts in category: 8

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
neutral  airmailrpl: It really is considered discourteous according to the Kudoz etiquette to post a suggestion and then post a disagree on another's suggestion
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20 hrs   confidence: Answerer confidence 4/5Answerer confidence 4/5
my hurt feelings


Explanation:
Meus pensamentos de mágoa => my hurt feelings

airmailrpl
Brazil
Local time: 03:30
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Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish, Native in PortuguesePortuguese
PRO pts in category: 68

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  Clauwolf
2 hrs
  -> agradeço
disagree  Uvierode Woglo: He is talking about his thoughts and not his feelings... it would sound weird for his feelings to be floating as mentioned in the first line... There's structure to poetry, so when you say 'anything goes', it shows you don't know much about it.
3 hrs
  -> it is a poem - so anything goes - It really is considered discourteous according to the Kudoz etiquette to post a suggestion and then post a disagree on another's suggestion
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