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Jun 17, 2017 20:21
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treated / would treat

Non-PRO English Other General / Conversation / Greetings / Letters basic English grammar/verb tenses
In 19 century, the pharmacy played an important role in people’s lives, for you could buy almost everything here, from ordinary drugs to cosmetics. Due to the lack of pharmaceutical specialists, the functions of a pharmacist were very often performed by physicians. That is why a doctor would quite often receive his patients right in the pharmacy and sometimes treated them rigth here using different methods.

I wonder what verbal form would be best (or more correct) to use here? Please advise.
Thank you.
P.S. This is my translation from Russian.
Responses
4 +8 either is OK
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Jun 17, 2017 21:34: Tony M changed "Level" from "PRO" to "Non-PRO"

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Discussion

Tony M Jun 21, 2017:
@ Asker As I explained below, under those circumstances, "right here" would indeed be OK; but you definitely need to try and avoid having the two instances of 'right' like this.
And frankly, if this text is intended to be spoken, then it needs revising specifically with that in mind; there are a number of turns of phrase that will either sound awkward when spoken, or simply do not fit with an oral register.
Andrew Vdovin (asker) Jun 19, 2017:
Thanks a lot for all the suggestions! As for the "right here" - well, this is a text which will be used verbally by a guide right in the pharmacy museum, so I thought "here" would be more appropriete than "there". Or am I wrong?
airmailrpl Jun 18, 2017:
sometimes treated them rigth here... sometimes treated them rigth here => sometimes treated them right there
philgoddard Jun 18, 2017:
Not "in 19 century". In the 19th century.

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either is OK

As you have used 'would often' to introduce the phrase, you could even use just 'treat', following on from the existing 'would'; note if you do choose to repeat 'would', it needs to go before the 'sometimes': 'and would sometimes treat'...

You might find the sentence flows better if you and in an 'even'; and the 2 instances of 'right' sound a bit clumsy. You may also need to watch out for here / there: your sentnce kind of begs rewording as "That is why a doctor would quite often receive his patients right there in the pharmacy and sometimes treated them on the spot." If the first 'there' is strongly implied, then it could sound awkward to change it to 'here' — unless, for example, this is a spoken commentary and the person is standing on the very blood-stained spot on the floor where they wer treated!
Peer comment(s):
agree Herbmione Granger : My preference: 'That is why a doctor would often receive his patients in the pharmacy and sometimes even treat them right there...' This structure avoids most redundancies, which are not tolerated well in English.
50 mins
Thanks, H/C! Yes, it really needs that sort of level of rewriting; in fact, I'd almost run it on using '..., which is why...'
agree Helena Chavarria : I would also use 'treat', without repeating 'would'.
1 hr
Thanks, Helena! It could work well, if attention is paid to the sentence structure.
agree Yasutomo Kanazawa
7 hrs
Thanks, Yasutomo-san!
agree philgoddard
8 hrs
Thanks, Phil!
agree Yvonne Gallagher : "treat right" awkward. I'd rephrase: That is why a doctor quite often SAW his patients in the pharmacy itself and WOULD sometimes treat them on the spot. (would treat=characteristic behaviour)
13 hrs
Thanks, G!
agree Arabic & More : Agree with herbalchemist and your response (continuing the sentence with a comma instead of beginning a new one).
13 hrs
Thanks, Amel!
agree Tina Vonhof (X) : Agree with Gallagy's suggestion.
18 hrs
Thanks, Tina!
agree acetran
3 days 10 hrs
Thanks, Ace!
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