May 25, 2011 07:37
12 yrs ago
French term
broyées par la lumière
French to English
Art/Literary
Poetry & Literature
sculpture
Context:
Dans mon village de pêcheurs au sud de Marseille, les couleurs semblaient bannies, ***broyées par la lumière***… Seuls, les bleus intenses du ciel et de la mer s'affrontaient...
The intense light of the Midi.
Dans mon village de pêcheurs au sud de Marseille, les couleurs semblaient bannies, ***broyées par la lumière***… Seuls, les bleus intenses du ciel et de la mer s'affrontaient...
The intense light of the Midi.
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Helen Shiner
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dispersed by the light
Possibly not as strong as the French, but at least it makes sense in English! Could be made stronger by saying 'fully dispersed by the light' or something similar.
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So now the astronomers had indirect evidence of a disk left over from the stars formation they had to get direct evidence. For this they used the ESO’s Very Large Telescope Interferometer (the VLTI), and with this they directly observed the disk .The disk is over 1,000 solar masses and its 130 AU wide; which is much less than a light year. The inner part of the disk has a temperature of around 2000 K, whereas the parts of the disk farther out are cooler. The stars disk will not last for much longer; it will soon be dispersed by the light being emitted by the star, which is 30,000 times brighter than our own star.
http://ya.astroleague.org/?p=1303
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Thanks, kashew
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So now the astronomers had indirect evidence of a disk left over from the stars formation they had to get direct evidence. For this they used the ESO’s Very Large Telescope Interferometer (the VLTI), and with this they directly observed the disk .The disk is over 1,000 solar masses and its 130 AU wide; which is much less than a light year. The inner part of the disk has a temperature of around 2000 K, whereas the parts of the disk farther out are cooler. The stars disk will not last for much longer; it will soon be dispersed by the light being emitted by the star, which is 30,000 times brighter than our own star.
http://ya.astroleague.org/?p=1303
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Thanks, kashew
Note from asker:
| Thanks - yes, it's this or crushed. |
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22 mins
dissolved by the light
It is the most poetic verb that I could think of.
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Or else, pulverized by the light.
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Or else, pulverized by the light.
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21 mins
Philippa Smith
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overwhelmed by the light
One option among many; the light is so overwhelming in its brightness that the colours seem to fade away....
You could also used "crushed", like in the French.
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Another thought: "defeated by the light" to reflect the slightly war-like tone. The colours have been defeated by the enemy - the light - and thus banished from light's territory, whereas the blues manage to stand firm and fight it out...
You could also used "crushed", like in the French.
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Another thought: "defeated by the light" to reflect the slightly war-like tone. The colours have been defeated by the enemy - the light - and thus banished from light's territory, whereas the blues manage to stand firm and fight it out...
Note from asker:
| Thanks - I think "crushed" might suit. |
50 mins
Carol Gullidge
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dissipated by the light
you can imagine the light breaking up/fading the colours
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DIFFRACTED BY THE LIGHT is perhaps closer to the source meaning
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DIFFRACTED BY THE LIGHT is perhaps closer to the source meaning
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51 mins
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drained/faded/crushed/belittled by the brightness
some ideas (I find the light hanging on the end a bit odd)
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squashed/flattened
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or how about - colours seem to have been bannished, unable to compete with the brighness of the light
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squashed/flattened
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or how about - colours seem to have been bannished, unable to compete with the brighness of the light
Note from asker:
| Thanks - "crushed" pleases me. |
| I had crushed but went for the colder, more scientific answer by Helen S. |
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Nikki Scott-Despaigne
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French term (edited):
les couleurs semblaient bannies, broyées par la lumière
colours were reduced to nothingness
Broyées is quite strong. Your image has to be strong but not heavy. I suggest taking the bit it depend upon into the language equation as it were.
les couleurs semblaient bannies, ***broyées par la lumière***
"colours were reduced to nothingness"
I've turned it round a little, but I'm not a great fan of lining up bits of sentences in English. I think that stylistic English cannot support it to the extent which French can.
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"In my village... it was if colour had been reduced to nothingness"
"Colour" or colours" ? Not sure whether singular or plural works better.
ANother suggestion : "...had been fired into oblivion".
les couleurs semblaient bannies, ***broyées par la lumière***
"colours were reduced to nothingness"
I've turned it round a little, but I'm not a great fan of lining up bits of sentences in English. I think that stylistic English cannot support it to the extent which French can.
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Note added at 5 hrs (2011-05-25 13:05:10 GMT)
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"In my village... it was if colour had been reduced to nothingness"
"Colour" or colours" ? Not sure whether singular or plural works better.
ANother suggestion : "...had been fired into oblivion".
Peer comment(s):
| agree |
Carolyn Yohn
: as if the colors had been exiled, or reduced to nothingness by the light" ... I like this best! Very poetic.
2 days 1 hr
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2 hrs
Colin Rowe
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obliterated/disintegrated by the (intensity of the) light
Adding to the thesaurus of destruction!
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Or, while we are at it, how about...
"annihilated"
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or even
"shattered"
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"fragmented" might also work.
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or
"ground to dust"
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Another one:
"diminished"
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"dashed to pieces"
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"washed out"
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Note added at 2 hrs (2011-05-25 10:04:17 GMT)
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Or, while we are at it, how about...
"annihilated"
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Note added at 3 hrs (2011-05-25 10:46:28 GMT)
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or even
"shattered"
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Note added at 3 hrs (2011-05-25 11:31:54 GMT)
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"fragmented" might also work.
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Note added at 3 hrs (2011-05-25 11:34:35 GMT)
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or
"ground to dust"
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Note added at 4 hrs (2011-05-25 11:57:17 GMT)
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Another one:
"diminished"
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"dashed to pieces"
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"washed out"
18 hrs
subdued by the light
In my fishermen's village south of Marseille, colors were seemingly banned, completely subdued by the light...
subdued completely = crushed = broyée (see web reference)
subdued completely = crushed = broyée (see web reference)
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