Mitsuko Yoshida Oct 21, 2013:

BD, Thank you very much. Your comment was very helpful.

B D Finch Oct 20, 2013:

@Asker There are a number of ways that a native speaker of English might reduce this caption to a manageable length by omitting definite articles and "was" (Sue-my's comment about possible confusion with "is" is wrong and seems confused). However, providing you with an entire caption seems to go beyond the scope of KudoZ.

Mitsuko Yoshida Oct 19, 2013:

Tina, Thank you very much for your comment. In general, an inauguration ceremony is ineviably conducted when a temple is completed or restored. So I think it is not necessary to say inaugurated. Also the original sentence is too long for the space.

Tina Vonhof (X) Oct 19, 2013:

Why not keep the original sentence? Your first suggestion fails to mention 'inauguration' and your second suggestion assumes that the restoration and inauguration took place in the same year, which may or not be true. I don't see anything wrong with the original sentence - it seems perfectly clear.

Mitsuko Yoshida Oct 19, 2013:

David, I forgot to say that I understand and agree with the explanation by Tony.

Mitsuko Yoshida Oct 19, 2013:

(continuation) And the native speaker agreed with Tony. But "The" of The main hall should be cut. Is that so? I learnt that "which is (was)" can be omitted. But be careful when omitting WAS so as not to be confused with IS.

Mitsuko Yoshida Oct 19, 2013:

Thank you David. Two refurbishment works were finished in 2007 and 2008, respectively. Another native speaker said only restored will do.
I think so. (to be condinued.)

David Moore (X) Oct 19, 2013:

yoshimi, I'm a bit uneasy about these answers, as I understand you to have altered 'inaugurated' to 'restored'. There is a clear difference between the two, as 'restoration' is the work of refurbishment, while 'inauguration' is normally a ceremonious reopening to public viewing, use etc. of something which has been restored. You must therefore be absolutely clear as to which is meant.

In either case, it must be expressed with the passive voice and the 'was' is thus essential, except as Tony M describes.

yoshimi (asker) Oct 18, 2013:

Addition: This is a caption to a photo.